A.O. Avalon

that's just it though, the characters you've met so far arent' supports, they're incidentals. they'll be lucky to get another scene. and they're meant to be a touch transparent. the ...

Ravin won't meet the girl if he doesn't lose, right? (just a feeling...) That's right! this is constructive critism because you know we love it, we just want to see ...

The cave as dank and smelt of rotting flesh, but it would have to do. Anywhere but the open as the sun ascends to it’s lofty perch in the sky, ...

er, that should be "AmericaN" however, i think i've proved over and over again that proof reading isn't exactly my forte. Fire, have you tried sending this to any publishers? ...

*sad* did you have to kill off all of Ravin's men? Corda is creepy!! i like it :D is neka the same guy ravin's fighting at the end? btw, teh ...

well not being able to find the paper is a legit reason... but don't let me catch you getting down on yourself like that again bubble!!! --Alyce--

lol, yes i found the first chapter, fire. (me unobservant? noooo never.) Yes, Kay, in America we say "zee" and not "zed". Differences like those are why it drives me ...

Scent of talcumn gentley floats through the air. Collar of a seersucker shirt and saltywarmyoung tears falling from round blues eyes to melt away soft cotton. Red lips-wax Brown stuble-light ...

gender ambiguity... maybe you can take that somewhere, lol.

i love the idea of drifting through honey..warm, secluded, viewing the world through a case of gold...which is kind of what love is at it's best. marshmellow poetry?